DJ-ing / Producing / Feedback anyone!?

Here is 1 min of a track Im working on. Tell me what you think
You will definetly know the melodie

http://soundcloud.com/user1879972/mathew-pathew-untitled

Its just off on all fronts. First there is this teasingly harsh kick which never returns, instead turns into a rather disappointing kick underneath a ping-pong-melody.

Apart from that the buildup where instruments are added one by one is something you really want to avoid, makes it sound very amateurish.

I would suggest giving the track more balls.

I am amateurish :P A lot of work then! Change the kick, the ping pong melody and do something about the build up! Then the lack of balls... Hmm.. how about adding some Duke Nukem vocals